2018高考英语满分作文怎样“得” 3页

第十二讲满分作文怎样9^——三步作文法(2016•全国卷乙)假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外资公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历(resume)0给外教MsJenkins写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)o注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。［解题思路］笫一步：依体裁谋篇章(结构对第一关)体裁应用文人称第一人称吋态一般现在吋内容写信求助外教帮助修改所附材料的文字和格式段落第一段：写信目的第二段：求助原因，求助外教修改所附材料的文字和格式第三段：表达期待第二步：列要点选句式（要点全及格线）要点一：我是二班李华，是你的学生。我写信向你求助。T，moneofyourstudents.T，mLiHuafromClassTwo.mwritingtoaskyouforhelp.要点二：今年暑假我想去一家外资公司兼职。ThissummerIintendtotakeupapart-timejobinaforeigncapitalcompany.要点三：申请书和个人简历已完成，真心地希望老师帮忙修改。Myapplicationandresumehavebeenpreparedand1sincerelyhopeyoucanhelpmepolishthem.要点四：修改内容Youcanhelpaddsomecontentsandcorrectsomemistakesandformat.要点五：表达期望Iwouldappreciateitifyoucoulddomeafavor・Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreply. 第三步：扣主题拓展句（句式美优秀分）要点一：升级句式（名词作同位语）I’moneofyourstudents,LihuafromClassTwo.I’mwritingtoaskyouforhelp.要点二拓展：今年暑假去一家外资公司兼职及做兼职的意义(非限制性定语从句)ThissummerIintendtotakeupapart-timejobinaforeigncapitaicompany,throughwhichIwouldliketobroadenmyhorizons，gainsomeworkingexpetieneeandmeetmynewfriends.要点三拓展：修改内容(Firstly•••Secondly•••Lastly---)Firstly,I’mwonderingifyoucanhelpaddsomecontents.Secondly,iftherearesomemistakesinthem,Thopeyoucanhelpcorrectthem.Lastly,Tattachsomematerialswhoseformathadbetterbechangedandhopeyoucanhelp.该生习作为四档作文，得分为18分。能覆盖所有内容要点；大部分句子基本正确,可以适当增加复合句的使用；文章词汇表达基本正确，希望能更多使用一些高级词汇；衔接成分太少，可以适当添加一些过渡词。1.第二句experiences改为experience。2•第六、七句可升级v.-ing作状语：I’mwritingyoualetter,hopingtogetyourguideandsuggestions・。3.文章句子可以适当加入过渡词:whatismore,worsestill,inaddition,and,besides,also,furthermore,too,moreover,aswel1as,additionally例女口第二段的3、4句Z间最好加Worsest订1。五档作文DearMsJenkins,I，moneofyourstudents,LiHuafromClassTwo.「mwritingtoaskforyourhelp.ThissummerIintendtotakeupapart-timejobinaforeigncapitalcompany,throughwhichIwouldliketobroadenmyhorizons,gainsomeworkingexperienceand吸匹JJ^LXlL典d§Jyapplicationandresumehavebeenpreparedand1sincerelyhopeyoucanhelpmepolishthem・Firstly,I’mwonderingifyoucanhelpaddsomecontents.Besides,iftherearesomemistakesinthem,Ihopeyoucanhelpcorrectthem.Lastly,Tattachsomematerialswhoseformathadbetterbechangedandhopeyoucanhelp. Twouldappreciateitifyoucouldtakethetroubletodosomuchforme.Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreply・Yourstruly,LiHua