iBT新托福30分满分作文赏析 7页

iBT新托福30分满分作文赏析很多新托福考试的考友总是在感叹，这个世界上能拿到的好作文实在是太少了，其实很多时候不是这些作文少，而是很多考友没有努力去发掘这些作文。这不是太傻论坛就有考友分享了自己的满分作文。无老师第一时间转过来，推荐给各位考友！拿这些满分作文都该做些什么呢？1看整篇结构，要看一看这些作文的结构是怎么展开的。要仔细的读一下，这些作文每一段的写作目的，到底是支持还是反对，以及哪几段支持，哪几段反对。2看段落结构，要仔细分析在一段之中，每一句话所起到的作用。到底是主题句，还是例证。3看句型多样性，要仔细想想这些作文每一句话说话的分寸。4比对自己的写法。看每一句话的时候，脑中都要思考，这句话中文是什么意思，如果是我自己来写，我会怎么写！并且在下一篇自己的作文中替换为这些用法。7 5用词多样性和准确性。6如果有需要的话，再背一下是最好的了，没有输入就没有输出吗！比如：Inthiscase,computerasarepresentativeofmoderntechnologyplaysanegativeroleinlearninginformation.这句话，我们自己很有可能写的就是，Inthiscase,computerthatisaequipmentofmoderntechnologyhaveabadeffectinlearninginformation.这里的差距就很十分明显了！因此，当给你美的东西，还要有一双发现美的眼睛！2011-8-2IndependentWriting：Doesmoderntechnologyhelpstudentslearnmoreinformationandlearnitmorequickly?Marvelousasitlooksatfirstsight,moderntechnologydoesnot7 helpstudentslearninformationatagreaterspeedandwithhigherefficiencyinmostcases;oritcouldworktowardstheoppositedirectionwhichledstudentstolosetheirinitiativetolearnandexplore.Firstofall,onepropertyofmoderntechnologyislatentlyharmfultoanylearningmind–itdistracts.Onethingwefeelaboutwhenwearesearchingforinformationonlineisthattheinternet,asanoutstandingexampleofmoderntechnologyandevenregardedastheinnovatorofeducation,providesuswithnotonlyrelevantresultstomakeuseof,butalsoexternallinkstoclick.MorethanonceIturnedonmycomputertocheckschoollibraryforresources,butendedupwatchingYoutubevideos.Inthiscase,computerasarepresentativeofmoderntechnologyplaysanegativeroleinlearninginformation.Wedoacquiremoreinformationwiththeconvenienttool,yetmostofthemareirrelevantandintheendprocrastinatingwouldlowerourlearning.Also,studentswouldeasilybecomedisorientedinthehugeseaofinformation.Althoughmoderntechnologycouldequipuswitheasyaccesstoinformation,thehugeamountof7 resourceswouldactuallyleaveusdiscombobulated.Therefore,itisonlywepossessinformationmorequicklyratherthanwelearnitmorequickly.AnillustratingexampleismyexperiencewithaHKdigitallibrarywhichstoresalmostallthebooksIdesire.AtfirstIenjoyeddownloadingthemfromthedatabase,however,onemonthlaterIendedupwithhundredsofbooksstoredinmyhardwareyetnoneofthemfinishedoreverclicked.Furthermore,moderntechnologygivesstudentsanillusionthatinformationandrealknowledgeiseasytolearn–justbyclickingmouseorwatchingvideos.Butinfactthisformsonlythefirststeptowardsusefulinformationandeffectivelearning,aslearningofanykindrequiresfullconcentrationandinteractivethinking,whicharealmostabsentinthepocessofpopulare-learningexperience.Tosummarize,moderntechnologydoesnothelpstudentslearnmoreinformationandlearnitmorequickly,thoughitdoesmakeaccesstoinformationandresourcesmuchmoreeasily.Thepopulare-learningstilllackstheconcentration,depth,andinteractionthatarethehallmarkoftraditionalways7 ofeducatingandlearning.2011-8-10TPOIndependentwriting：我们生活的时代比父辈们年轻时生活的时代更好还是更坏？Itseemsthatpeoplealwayshaveadesiretocompare:amIprettierthanothers?Arewelivinginabetterage?Or,asthequestiongoes,isourlifeeasierandmoreenjoyablethanitwasseveraldecadesago?Iwouldsayno,asIhavewitnessedthestruggleandparadoxofourgeneration.Firstofall,wearenowlivinginanageofrevolutionwithnoprevioushumanexperiencethatcouldbereferredto.Livinginsuchafast-changingworldwouldnotbeeasyandcomfortableatall;witheverythingkeepschanging,everyonehastomovefastinordertocatchupwiththemajority.However,peopleweremuchmorestableandcare-freewhenourgrandparentswerechildren;theydidnothavetolearnasecondlanguageinordertogetabetterjob,orreadalotinordertogetinformed.Yetinourage,thesearesupposedtobetheresponsibilityof7 youngpeople.Anotherdiscomfortofourageisthatweareexperiencinginterpersonalalienation.Withthedevelopmentofcommunicationtechnology,peopleinfactbecomealienatedwithfriendsandrelativessincetheycouldbesoeasilyaccessedviaphoneoremail.Toooftenwefeelthatfewofourfriendsaretruefriends,withoutthetraditionalfeelingofmutualaffectionwhichcouldonlybecreatedbylongtimeapart.Butseveraldecadesago,peopletreasuredtheirfriendsandmaintainedrelativelycloseinterpersonalrelations,whichismuchmoreenjoyablethantheestrangementsweareexperiencing.Thelastfactorthathasmadeouragesouncomfortableistheabusiveuseoftechnology.Althoughitbringsmuchconvenience,itessentiallychangeshuman–wearenolongerthemasteroftools,butinsteadtheslavesofdevices.Werushtometrostationinordertocatchanearlytrain,sitinfrontofradioactivecomputersalldaylonginordertogetourworkdone,andstayinair-conditionedroomsallsummerwithoutexperiencingthenaturalchangesoutsidethickcementwalls.7 Severaldecadesago,peoplecouldstillliveclosertonatureandmakerationaluseofmoderntechnology,whichtomeistheessenceofhumanlivingexperience.However,thecomparisonbetweendifferenttimesisitselfridiculous.Thecriteriacouldnotbeeasilydetermined,andopinionsarehighlypersonal.Anyway,wehavealongerlifespan,moreadvancedmedicalfacilities,andeasiertrafficthanourgrandparentwhentheywerechildren,andweshouldtreasurethepresentexperience.Imaginationofthepastmightonlybenostalgia–ifIaskmygrandparentsthesamequestion,theymightaswellsaythatourlifeismuchbetterthanthepastgenerations.Whoknows?Aslongastheworldisstillpeaceful,lifeatanytimewouldnotbecometoodifficulttohandle.7