名师解析gre满分作文重点：Critical Thinking 7页

智课网GRE备考资料 名师解析gre满分作文重点：CriticalThinking名师解析gre满分作文重点：CriticalThinking.以下是一篇ETS提供的6分ISSUE作文，个人认为，其平实、毫无模板痕迹的语言多少能帮助备考的同学进一步理解考试的重点——CriticalThinking.题目：Toomuchtime,money,andenergyarespentdevelopingnewandmoreelaboratetechnology.Societyshouldinsteadfocusonmaximizingtheuseofexistingtechnologyfortheimmediatebenefitofitscitizens.ImustsaythatIrejectthisstatement.Whileitistruethatweneedtosupportsocietyasmuchaspossiblewithcurrenttechnology,thatdoesnotinanywaymeanthatweshouldstopprogressingsimplybecauseourcurrenttechnologycannothandlealltheproblemswehavebroughttoit.Doesthatmeanthatweshouldsimplyacceptthestatusquoandmakedo?No,Idon’tthinkso.Todosowouldbetantamounttoadoptingafatalisticapproach;Ithinkmostpeoplewouldrejectthat.Technologyhashelped,andithashurt.Withoutit,wewouldneverhaveourstandardofliving,norqualityofnutrition,expectationofalongandproductivelifespan,andtheunshakablebeliefthatourlivescanbemadeevenbetter.Butithasalsobroughtusuniversalpollution,weaponssopowerfulastobecapableofrenderingusextinct,andtheconsequentfearforoursurvivalasspeciesandasaplanet.Technologyisindeedadouble-edgedsword.Andyet,Istillhavetoargueinitsfavor,becausewithoutit,wehavenohope.Somemightarguethatwewouldbebetteroffwithouttechnology.Theymightsaythatareturntoalesstechnologicallydrivenapproachtolifewouldhavethebenefitsofreducingstressandallowingustolivesimpler,happierlives,likethoseofourforebears.Suchanideaisseductive,somuchsothatmuch ofartandallofnostalgiaaredevotedtoit.Butuponcloserinspection,onerealizesthatsuchamovewouldonlyreturnustoalifeofdifferentkindsofstress,oneoffalsesimplicity,onefraughtwithdanger.Itwouldbealifewithoutantibioticswhereaminorcutcouldprovedeadly.Itwouldbealifewherechildbirthisthemainkillerofwomen,andwhereanemergencyisdealtwithintermsofhoursanddaysinsteadofminutesandhours;alifewheretherearenophonesorcarsorplanesorcentralheating,noprovendrugtherapiestotreatmentalillness,nocomputers.Wouldthisworldreallymakepeoplehappy?Whatwealreadyhave,wehave.Andsincetheonlywaytomoveisforward,insteadofallowingourselvestobeparalyzedbyfearandworry,weneedtolearnhowtocleanupthepollutionwehavecaused,andhowtodealwithaworldthatfeedsonweaponsandmassdestruction.Doingthesethingsmeanshavingtomoveawayfromtechnologyintoamoredifficultrealm,thatofdiplomacyandcompromise:tomovefromthebullystanceof“IambiggerandbetterandIhavemoretoysandsoIwin”toaplacewhereeveryonewins.Technologyisthethingthatwillallowpeopletodothat.But,advancedasitis,itisstillinitsinfancy.Wehavetoallowittogrowupandmatureinordertoreaptherealrewardsthatitcanbring.Andthereareevengreaterrewardsaheadofusthanwhattheworldhasalreadyexperienced.Whentechnologyispushedtotheouteredge,thatiswhereserendipitousdiscoveriescanoccur.Thishasbeenseenthroughouttechnologicaladvancement,buttheeasiestexampleisprobablythespaceprogramwhichmadeusthink,reallyhard,abouthowtodothingsinadifferentenvironment.Itgaveustelecommunications,newfabricsandinternationalcooperation.Paramedicaldevices,sothatpeoplecanbetreatedevenastheyarebeingtransportedtothehosptal,areadirectdevelopmentofthattechnology. Noneofthiswouldhavehappenedinthetimeframethatitdidifwehadnotpushedfortechnologicaladvancement.Ifwehaddecidedto“focusonmaximizingtheuseofexistingtechnology”insteadoffoolishlyreachingforthestars,wewouldnothavemadethosediscoverieswhichnowarethebedrockofthe21stcentury.分析：字数：651语言：平实的语句完全没有网络流行模板的痕迹，也是许多过了6级的考生通过练习可以达到的水平。ImustsaythatIrejectthisstatement.Doesthatmeanthatweshouldsimplyacceptthestatusquoandmakedo?No,Idon’tthinkso.Technologyhashelped,andithashurt.Technologyisindeedadouble-edgedsword.Andyet,Istillhavetoargueinitsfavor,becausewithoutit,wehavenohope.……当然，这并不意味，在GRE作文考试中，平实的语言比润色后的语言有更多的优势。从这篇作文中，我们可以得到以下两条重要信息：1、通过记忆大量模板使语言“全副武装”、“气势汹汹”并非高分作文的必要条件，这种方式的弊端在课堂上我们已阐述过。2、在陈述idea的过程中，体现出criticalthinking才是成功的关键。我们在课堂上对criticalthinking这一概念做过多次详细的解释，现在请大家一起来体会这一概念在文中的运用。第一段：(表明立场)ImustsaythatIrejectthisstatement.(让步)Whileitistruethatweneedtosupportsocietyasmuchaspossiblewithcurrenttechnology,(折回自己立场)thatdoesnotinanywaymeanthatweshouldstopprogressingsimplybecauseourcurrenttechnologycannothandlealltheproblemswehavebroughttoit.第二段： (概述科技的两面性)Technologyhashelped,andithashurt.(具体讨论科技的贡献)Withoutit,wewouldneverhaveourstandardofliving,norqualityofnutrition,expectationofalongandproductivelifespan,andtheunshakablebeliefthatourlivescanbemadeevenbetter.(具体讨论科技的危害)Butithasalsobroughtusuniversalpollution,weaponssopowerfulastobecapableofrenderingusextinct,andtheconsequentfearforoursurvivalasspeciesandasaplanet.Technologyisindeedadouble-edgedsword.(表明已考虑到科技的危害，但是依然坚持自己立场)Andyet,Istillhavetoargueinitsfavor,becausewithoutit,wehavenohope.第三段：(提出反方的立场)Somemightarguethatwewouldbebetteroffwithouttechnology.Theymightsaythatareturntoalesstechnologicallydrivenapproachtolifewouldhavethebenefitsofreducingstressandallowingustolivesimpler,happierlives,likethoseofourforebears.Suchanideaisseductive,somuchsothatmuchofartandallofnostalgiaaredevotedtoit.(通过具体论据反驳反方的观点)Butuponcloserinspection,onerealizesthatsuchamovewouldonlyreturnustoalifeofdifferentkindsofstress,oneoffalsesimplicity,onefraughtwithdanger.Itwouldbealifewithoutantibioticswhereaminorcutcouldprovedeadly.Itwouldbealifewherechildbirthisthemainkillerofwomen,andwhereanemergencyisdealtwithintermsofhoursanddaysinsteadofminutesandhours;alifewheretherearenophonesorcarsorplanesorcentralheating,noprovendrugtherapiestotreatmentalillness,nocomputers.Wouldthisworldreallymakepeoplehappy?第四段：(在第三段驳论的基础上进一步立论)Whatwealreadyhave,wehave.Andsincetheonlywaytomoveisforward,insteadofallowingourselvestobeparalyzedbyfearandworry,weneedto learnhowtocleanupthepollutionwehavecaused,andhowtodealwithaworldthatfeedsonweaponsandmassdestruction.Doingthesethingsmeanshavingtomoveawayfromtechnologyintoamoredifficultrealm,thatofdiplomacyandcompromise:tomovefromthebullystanceof“IambiggerandbetterandIhavemoretoysandsoIwin”toaplacewhereeveryonewins.第五段：Technologyisthethingthatwillallowpeopletodothat.(指出支持观点存在的一点不足)But,advancedasitis,itisstillinitsinfancy.(解决方案)Wehavetoallowittogrowupandmatureinordertoreaptherealrewardsthatitcanbring.Andthereareevengreaterrewardsaheadofusthanwhattheworldhasalreadyexperienced.Whentechnologyispushedtotheouteredge,thatiswhereserendipitousdiscoveriescanoccur.Thishasbeenseenthroughouttechnologicaladvancement,buttheeasiestexampleisprobablythespaceprogramwhichmadeusthink,reallyhard,abouthowtodothingsinadifferentenvironment.Itgaveustelecommunications,newfabricsandinternationalcooperation.Paramedicaldevices,sothatpeoplecanbetreatedevenastheyarebeingtransportedtothehospital,areadirectdevelopmentofthattechnology.Noneofthiswouldhavehappenedinthetimeframethatitdidifwehadnotpushedfortechnologicaladvancement.Ifwehaddecidedto“focusonmaximizingtheuseofexistingtechnology”insteadoffoolishlyreachingforthestars,wewouldnothavemadethosediscoverieswhichnowarethebedrockofthe21stcentury.gre满分作文重点：CriticalThinking.当然，提高criticalthinking能力的同时，也很有必要包装语言。